Selasa, 05 Januari 2016




Definition paragraph sleigh bells  (giring giring) dance
Steps 1: brainstorming by questioning.
a.       Definition of sleigh bells dance? give example
b.      How the popular of sleigh bells dance  in central Kalimantan dan Barito?
c.       Story of sleigh bells dance?
Steps 2 : outline of paragraph.
a.       Topic sentence :
One of the best dance in central Kalimantan is sleigh bells dance.
b.      -Supporting sentence :
Definition of sleigh bells dance.
Supporting sentence :
Sleigh bells dance supplies are thin bamboo (telang) contains seeds pinding.
-supprting sentence :
The popular of sleigh bells dance  in central Kalimantan dan regancy Barito.
-supporting sentence :
Sleigh bells dance danced when there is an event like welcoming guests as well as a distraction to the parties or a particular event.
c.       Concluding sentence.
In concluding, as the younger generation should preserve, study, and preserve the traditional dances from extinction.
Steps 3 :
First paragraph
sliegh bells (giring giring)  dance

One of the best danced in central Kalimantan is sleigh dance. Sleigh bells dance is one of the dance  areas and districts of Central Kalimantan and  Barito  in particular. For example, the sleigh bells dance.  For the people of Central Kalimantan and Barito regency, danced bells are overflowing expression of excitement and pleasure of the community. Next ,sleigh bells danced supplies are thin bamboo contains seeds pinding.  Sleigh bells brought by the dancer is thin bamboo (telang) contains the seeds "Piding" and shaken to create rhythmic tones are the bells. Than, the popular of sleigh bells danced  in central Kalimantan dan regancy Barito. This dance was popularized by the Dayak tribe Ma'anyan and danced in joyful events, welcoming guests as well as a distraction to the parties or a particular event. In addition, Sleigh bells dance is also used as a social dance among young people. After that, Sleigh bells  danced when there is an event.  The events such as  welcoming guests as well as a distraction to the parties or a particular event. In concluding, as the younger generation should preserve, study, and preserve the traditional sleigh bells dance from extinction.

Sleigh bells(Giring Giring) dance : dance in Central Kalimantan and Barito regency.

Barito  in particular : one of  regancy in  kalimantan.
Piding : content of piding.
the Dayak tribe Ma'anyan : Ma’anyan  is one of tribe Dayak.

3 komentar:

  1. I think this paragraph is not unity and coherence. in every supporting sentence, you should use signal order. Topic sentence and concluding sentence, you must underline. Every supporting sentence you should give example/minor.

    BalasHapus
  2. I dont understand in your text there is (telang) what does it mean?
    in the third sentence it is wrong position of signal (,).

    BalasHapus
  3. I agree with mei that paragraph is not unity and coherence, and i suggest you to use the signal order. And the last pleas underline your topic sentence and concluding sentence, that will makes everyone easy to find it.

    BalasHapus